Dear Vishweshwariah Prakash and your team,
I am happy to have been among those requested to provide feedback on the document titled Food Losses And Waste In The Context Of Sustainable Food Systems V0 DRAFT.
Generally, I found the document very informative and interesting to read and I look forward to receiving the final version. It may not be within my mandate to highlight some of the minor errors in the document but please bear with me if I have overstepped my mandate.
I am of the view that a list of acronyms be created for easy reference, since there are quite a number of abbreviations: HLPE, FLW, OECD, SFS, GHG, APHLIS, WRAP, BCFN, EPA, IFPRI, HACCP, NCC, EC, UR, GAP, GVP, IICA, CaC, USD, ALRMP, FEBA, WFP, BSE, AVEBE, FSC, to mention but a few. They may look familiar but for those who will find them inconveniencing to memorise, a section on acronyms would be ok.
These words are incorrectly spelt or misused:
‘tor’ instead of ‘for’ (page 21 line 34)
‘loose’ instead of ‘lose’ (papge 22 line 14)
‘vegetables’ instead of ‘vegetable’ (page 24 line 18)
‘moist’ instead of ‘moisture’ and ‘rotten’ instead of ‘rotting’ (page 61 Box 15 para 3 last line)
‘marketing’ instead of ‘marketed’ (page 63 Box 17 para 1 last line)
‘way’ instead of ‘ways’ (page 64 line 50)
‘mean’ instead of ‘means’ (page 65 line 28)
The following words are stacked together and should be separated by spaces:
Page 6: line 46 words 9 & 10; line 47 words 4 & 5
Page 8 line 29 words 1 & 2
Page 11 line 10 words 1 & 2 of the new sentence; line 37 words 3 &4
Page 12 Box 2: entire opening sentence
Page 13 line 34 between countries in brackets and the word ‘have’
Page 16 line 26: inside brackets between the author and ‘et al)
Page 17 line 9 words 6 & 7
Page 18 line 9: 8th & 9th words of the new sentence
Page 19 lines: 21 the last words; 35 12th & 13th words; 37 1st and 2nd words; footnote: ‘foodcommodity’ instead of ‘food commodity’; ‘marketscombined’ instead of ‘markets combined’
Page 20 lines: 5 2nd & 3rd words; 6 last two words of old sentence; 27 4th & 3rd last words
Page 21 line 18: 4th & 3rd last words
Page 22 lines: 17 1st & 2nd words of new sentence; 21 5th & 4th last words; 22 3rd & 2nd last words; 53 5th & 4th last words
Page 23 lines: 15 ‘foodsafety’ instead of ‘food safety’; 22 1st & 2nd words; 30 5th, 6th & 7th words
Page 24 line 52: ‘weightproducing’ instead of ‘weight producing’ & ‘dayin’ instead of ‘day in’
Page 25 lines 34, 38 & 39
Page 26 line 1
Page 28 lines: 25 & 43
Page 29 lines: 3, 20 & 45
Page 31 lines 9, 25, 27 & 42
Page 33 lines: 12 & 22
Page 34 lines: 37, 45 & 46
Page 35 line 20
Page 36 line 49
Page 37 line 50
Page 38 lines: 2, 12, 17 & 22
Page 40 line 25
Page 42 lines: 37, 39 & 41
Page 44 line 21 (title)
Page 46 (Box 4) last sentence paras 3, 4: sentences 1 & 2; last para (2nd last line)
Page 47 lines: 4, 8, 9 & 12; Box 5 line 2
Page 48 Box 6 para 2 line 3; para 3 lines 1, 2, 3, 4, 6, 9
Page 50 lines: 10, 16, 19
Page 51 lines: 21, 25, 26, 33, 35 & 36
Page 52 lines: 1, 2, 3; Box 9 para 1 3rd last line; para 2 3rd line
Page 53 line 17
Page 54 lines: 33 & 41
Page 55 lines: 6, 8; Box 11 para 2 2nd last line
Page 56 Box 12 para 2 lines 1, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9 & last line
Page 57 lines: 6, 19, 36, 38, 47
Page 58 lines: 10, 20, 22, 26; Box 13 para 1 line 3 & 4
Page 59 lines: 11 & 44
Page 62 lines: 10 & 27
Page 63 line 8; Box 17 para 1 lines 2, 4 & 9
Page 64 lines: 29 & 44
Page 65 line 32
The following sentences are also stacked together with no spaces between full stops and the intervening sentences:
Page 6 line 28
Page 11 line 14
Page 12 line 20
Box 2 line 2
Page 15 line 14
Page 21 line 36
Page 23 line 6
Page 26 line 13
Page 28 lines: 51 & 52
Page 30 line 52
Page 31 line 53
Page 33 line 25
Page 40 lines: 5 & 14
Page 46 Box 4 para 3 line 7; para 4 line 3
Page 47 Box 5 last bullet
Page 50 line 26
Page 52 lines: 16 & 25
Page 53 Box 10 line 7
Page 54 line 50
Page 56 Box 12 line 7
Page 57 lines: 9, 18, 38 & 58
Page 58 lines: 7 & 21
Page 60 line 1
Page 62 line 24
Page 66 line 9.
I also noted that there are references that are indicated in the text but not cited e.g. but not exhaustive:
Alexander (2013)
BCFN (2012)
Bett & Nguyo (2007)
BIOIS (2010)
Bulitha et al (2012)
Cohen (2013)
Cohen et al (2003)
HLPE (2012)
Parfitt (2013)
Ericsen (2011)
Eldin & Farag (2008)
IFPRI (2010)
IME (2013)
Ingram (2008)
Weber (2008)
C-Tech (2004)
Florkowski et al (2009)
Food Chain (2009)
Frimpong et al (2012)
Fox & Fineche (2013)
Gettinger (1996)
Goodwin et al (2002)
Greger (2007)
Humera et al (2009)
Johns (2005)
Kader (2002; 2005)
Kallaberken (2013)
Kankolongo et al (2009)
Kessova (2013)
Lewis et al (2005)
Li (2003)
Ilich & Vukosavlevic (2010)
McCaffree (2009)
Midgley (2013)
Mittal (2007)
Nicholas (2002)
Njie (2009)
Postharvest Hub (2008)
This author is Rutten (2013) (in text) but cited as Rutton (2013) in the list of references.
Schneider (2013)
SEPA (2008)
Thiagarajah (2012)
USDA (2009)
Vereijken & Linnemann (2006)
Webber et al (2001)
Webber et al (2008)
Whitehair (2013)
Williams (2012)
WRAP (2012)
Wyngaard (2013)
Yang (2006)
Yusuf & He (2011)
Giregon Olupot
Department of Agricultural Production
College of Agricultural and Environmental Sciences
Makerere Uuniversity
P. O Box 7062
Kampala Uganda
Emails: [email protected]; [email protected]
Giregon Olupot