It is indeed well written document. It contains almost all parts of the food and nutrition aspects . However, What there is missing is mention of issue of land concentration in few hands all around the world ( land reforms issues.) We believe that lack of land reforms is basic hurdle behind access to resources. Concentration of land in few hands deprives majority from access to land and subsequent blocked access to agriculture products ( food ). Therefore, this document should make  commitment to promote land reforms all around the world.

Secondly, this document should also mention FAO responsible Governance of tenure of land, fisheries and forests in the Context of national food security. This declaration should endorse the guidelines.

Thirdly, This declaration seems to promotes role of IFIs which are not in favour. Doing business guidelines of the Bank  produce sufficient  evidence that  Bank has nothing to do with common man's concerns. 

Suggestion for 4. Specific comments in the appropriate fields relating to these commitments (paragraph 13):

Commitment b)

reshape food systems through promotion of new legislations, development and implementation  of  coherent public policies and investment plans throughout food value chains to serve the health and nutrition needs of the growing world population by providing access to safe, nutritious and healthy foods in a sustainable and resilient way;